Short story- Love parameters

“she loves me “, he said while stamping his legs on the ground.

In your dreams, she loves only and only me “, the other boy replied in a stiff voice.

For a second or two, there was complete silence in the room, They were both staring at each other angrily and panting heavily.

The storm was brewing and the clouds were thundering {nothing dramatic it was a rainy season} they both clenched their teeth hard.

She made my favorite dish yesterday remember??!! She loves me the most”, the first boy said

Oh really!!!, it was my favorite dish too and also yesterday she brought a new watch for me, remember??!, the other boy replied.

Now the things were going a little out of the hand, they were about to engage in a fistfight, so eventually, she had to intervene, she had a glass of carrot juice in her hand, “whoever will finish this in one go, is the one I love most”, she said and smirked.

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Both of them hate carrot juice and she knows that,

You drink it, she loves you the most, “the first one said

“No, no you drink it, I guess you are the one she loves”, the other replied.

That’s when dad returned from the market, “it’s a humid day, give me a glass of water, my neck is as dry as Sahara desert “, he said while wiping off sweat from his forehead.

She handed him the same glass of carrot juice. Dad drank it all as he was very thirsty.

The mother of the two smiled and the kids were startled, now they know who does their mother loves the most.

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117 thoughts on “Short story- Love parameters”

  1. A story well told. I like the way you’ve expressed the emotions of tension at the begining and love at the end. Really good writing. I’m guessing the husband doesn’t like the carrot juice to but passed since he was really thirsty😏

    1. We can say that the husband’s luck was in his favour otherwise the story would have started and ended with tension only.πŸ˜πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ Thank you very much for your opinion πŸ˜€

  2. Aw Vani you are a talent✨You have a way of writing short stories that touch your heart and plant a huge smile on your face.

    My favourite! Xx

  3. That was such a cute story! Had me engaged till the end. It was humorous and it put a smile on my face. You are really good at writing relatable urban stories😊 Probably I like them so much since I can relate them to my household.

    1. yeah that’s what my inspiration is writing about something which I see daily in my surroundings!!!! Thank you very much for reading❀❀❀

  4. The suspense , the questions ,the characters in your story are always a mystery they unfold in the end . A very unique , engaging and creative style of story writing .I liked this one too looks like mother loves father more than the kids or may be the other way?

  5. This story is endlessly clever. You are definitely the master of surprise endings! You write in such a way that captivates the reader until the very end and brings characters and their actions to life despite us only getting to know them in a few words.

    1. Awww thank you so much for reading and always giving me these beautiful reviews, it really means a lot to me…❀❀❀
      I am glad you are liking my stories 😊

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